雅思小作文满分学习法
雅思小作文满分学习法
作为一个常年奋战在雅思教育一线的老师, 我个人认为雅思写作并不难, 无论是要求雅思写作6.5分或者7分, 但是还是可以看见大多数的学生依旧在6分左右挣扎。 其问题在于复习的方式不正确。
今天我将要和大家分享小作文的正确复习思路, 希望大家尽量避免走弯路。
小作文的分数是占作文总分的1/3,因此总分是3分
重点:雅思小作文只需要10篇范文就可以达到2.5分。
重点:学会分析才是关键,今天带领大家分析10 篇范文中的一篇
首先,我们先来看一下错误的复习方式。(如果目前你依旧沿用这样的复习方式请尽快停止)
第一种:背范文
例如,我给大家打出的是剑桥雅思7的Test 2的范文

The graph illustrates changes in the amount of beef, lamb, chicken and fish consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004. In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities (around 150 grams),while much less fish was consumed (just over 50 grams). However, during this 25-year period the consumption of beef and lamb fell dramatically to approximately 100 grams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most stable. The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, overtaking that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared to almost 250 grams per person per week. Overall, the graph show how the consumption of chicken increased dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period.
我们来分析一下有点和弊端
1)优点在于,加强了词汇的积累,我们会学到一些好的表达和单词,例如:illustrate , changes in the amountof ,approximately
2)缺点在于:我们考场上不能遇见一模一样的文章, 所以我们还是不知道如何着手写作文
第二种:英文译成汉语,再讲汉语翻译成英文。 进行比较式地批改。我们依旧用上面的文章举例。
该图表显示了1979年至2004年间特定欧洲国家消费的牛肉,羊肉,鸡肉和鱼类数量的变化。1979年,牛肉是这些食品中最受欢迎的食品,每人每周消费约225克。羊肉和鸡肉的食用量相近(约150克),而消费的鱼则少得多(仅50克以上)。然而,在这25年期间,牛肉和羊肉的消费量急剧下降至约100克和55克。鱼类的消费量也有所下降,但远远低于50克,因此虽然它仍然是最不受欢迎的食物,但消费水平最为稳定。另一方面,鸡肉的消费呈上升趋势,超过1980年的羊肉和1989年的牛肉。到2004年,每人每周飙升至近250克。总体而言,该图显示了鸡肉的消费量如何显着增加,而这些其他食品的受欢迎程度在此期间有所下降
然后学生会做自己的翻译 并且和范文做比较进行修改 。
优点:积累自己的盲点,例如:用词不准确,或者找出自己不会翻译的地方进行积累。
缺点:1)只单纯得围绕词汇,和语法。2)有时候不能判断自己写的词汇和语法是否也是正确得。 因为有时一些汉语其实有着多种的表达方式。
总结:上述的两种方式:核心都是围绕词汇展开, 语法展开但是评分标准中这只是其中的两项。
其次:我们来看看雅思小作文的评分标准

它由四部分构成
1)task achievement 任务完成情况
2)Coherence and cohesion 连贯
3)Lexical resource 词汇
4)Grammatical Range and Accuracy 语法
这四部分的成绩总和除以4才得到我们的小作文分数 。
因为我们不能只关注后两个,所以我个人认为学生背范文和做汉译英都不能完全照顾所有的评分标准。
因为,我来带大家分享一下如何才能真正的学习小作文

这个图是剑桥雅思7的test2的小作文
Step1 : 在第一段我们都知道:主要是进行和题目的同义替换:
题目:The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
范文:The graph illustrates changes in the amounts of beef, lamb, chicken and fish consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
总结:1)below 是在小作文中永远不写的
2)show 可以和illustrate 互换,
3)consumption 可以换作它的动词来进行同义替换,
Show the consumption of =illustrate changes in …consumed (要求文章本身是动态图)
4)题目将some different kinds of meat 在同义替换中变成所有图片上的具体词汇。
因此:我们要学会的是总结中的四条。
学以致用:The graph below shows the consumption of coal and some different kinds of energy in a European country between 1970 and 2000.
我们只用在这篇范文中学到的知识进行替换:
The graph illustrates changes in the amounts of petrol and coal consumed in a European country between 1970 and 2000.
Step 2
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities (around 150 grams),while much less fish was consumed (just over 50 grams).
我们从评分的四个方面分析:
1)任务回应:(在每个小作文的题目要求都有:Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.)总结信息通过选择和报告主要特点,并在相关的地方进行比较。)
因此核心是:总结通过选择和写出主要的特点, 并且比较
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities (around 150 grams),while much less fish was consumed (just over 50 grams).
因此我们来看看:
任务回应:1)选择:*也就是起点值一定要写
在这个句子中:我们根据图片发现范文写的是:四条线的起点,并且是每条线都写了,
2)比较:(从大到小)
哪条线先写:beef (因为它的消耗量最大),然后是limb和chicken 放在一起写(因为他们数值是相似的) ,最后是fish (因为消耗量是最小的)
总结:1)从大到小来写 2)从起点写起 3)如果有相似的数据一定要放在一起写(这是可以体现比较的方式)
连贯的体现:1)这两个句子中的主语都是以肉类作为开头,其次当两个呈现比较的时候可以选用while
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities (around 150 grams),while much less fish was consumed (just over 50 grams).
词汇:我们在这两个句子中学到了:1)如何描述最高级: the most popular
2)如何修饰最高剂 by far +最高级的修饰
3)如果描述某一个具体的数字:with about 225 grams consumed per person per week.(用with 的独立主格结构)
Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities (around 150 grams)(用介词短语的方式写)
much less fish was consumed (just over 50 grams).
4)如何准确描述数字: 大约 around .如果是多一点just over +数字
语法的多样性:In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities (around 150 grams),while much less fish was consumed (just over 50 grams).
在这两个句子中同样是描述肉类的消耗量:
1)第一个采用的是主系表(表述最高级)
2)描述数字采用了with的独立主格结构
3)羊肉和鸡肉采用的是被动语态形式
这就是语法多样性的体现。
总结:任何一篇文章先学习后再进行运用就一定能起到事半功倍的效果。
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